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Writing Samples
Band 2

In the past when students did a univeristy degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas knowledge and experience and support arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

With the development of
globalization
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,there are more and more
students
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to study
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studying
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 abroad. I
believer
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believe
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 that the benefits
overweigh
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 the drawbacks. Studying abroad can promote friendly
exchages
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exchanges
 between countries.
As
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 the same time ,we can't ignore
that
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the
issuse
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issue
 of identity. On the one hand ,
students
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 who
chose
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choose
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study to
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to study
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another
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in another
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 country can broaden
theri
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their
 horizons.
when
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 they arrive
oversea
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overseas
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,they are not just learning the knowledge from the textbook,but
also
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 need to solve some trivial problems of daily life.
This
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 way could assist them with a powerful
capatible
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capacity
 of
care themself
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 and
construe
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construct
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muliculture
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multiculturalism
.
Alos
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 studying abroad boosts the local economy and promotes exchanges between
counties
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countries
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.The reason is that the overseas student
need
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needs
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 to rent
house
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 and live locally.Gradually, the local economy will be
boost
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 by
students
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.
On the other hand
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 ,
students
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 who have studied abroad since childhood have returned
their
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to their
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 identity. They may
be
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not know about their hometown and country culture.Since they have less chance to community with local people.
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,there are many
childhood
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children
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students
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 studied
Amercia
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America
,and they don't know how to speak
chinese
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Chinese
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and
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or
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chinese
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Chinese
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 culture either. They will think
themself are
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themselves to be
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 an
Americian
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American
.
At
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As
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the
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a
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 result ,they have
large
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a large
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issuse
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issue
 of identity.

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structure
Plan a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then give two ideas for the good and two for the bad, with a small ending.
coherence
Keep a steady form. Use 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show the two sides, and giveone simple example for each idea.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. For example, 'believe' not 'believer', 'issues' not 'issuse'. Use simple words and short sentences.
vocabulary
Use one clear example for each idea. For instance, 'studying abroad can help learn a new language'.
style
Keep sentences short and start a new idea on a new line. This helps the reader follow your point.
idea
The writer tries to discuss both sides.
structure
There is a basic 'on the one hand / on the other hand' plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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