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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

People
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 believe that modern
teachology
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technology
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stuck
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stick
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pepople
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people
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beacuse
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because
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people
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.
on
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hans
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hand
,
others
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make
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makes
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people
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 driven apart.
Sinse
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Since
 it may reduce the chance of
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 chatting, and
driven
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apart
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us apart
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.
People
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 can have a
sprit
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spirit
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 of
solidarty
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solidarity
 as modern technology can deliver diverse
people
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's
opnions
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opinions
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social media like
instagram
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Instagram
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,
people
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makes
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 reels and share their through on it. Through the internet,
people
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's views
being deliver
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 to everyone. After that,
people
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 can get the view of
others
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, if they can
then
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 same
though
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thought
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, they can have a privet chat
in
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on
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the
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apply
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instargram
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Instagram
. It can help them
makes
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make
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 new
fridens
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friends
,
then
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 increase the sense of
solidarty
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solidarity
.
However
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,
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others
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other
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people
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 believe
mordern
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modern
 technology
drive
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drives
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people
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 apart. Like the example of
instagram
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Instagram
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 reels, in the comments function,
peole
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people
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respone
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respond
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others
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to others
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.
This
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allow
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allows
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share
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to share
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opnions
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opinions
, but at the same
times
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time
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, everyone's views
is
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are
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 not the same.
Therefore
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, they may have
argue
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 on the views. It makes a risk that
people
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easier
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be more easily
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 driven apart. In my
opnions
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opinion
, modern technology
make
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makes
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more
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us more
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 driven apart as we no
more
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longer
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 have
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the needs
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needs
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need
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 to have
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 chatting as
people
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 can chat on their phone
by
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via
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facetime
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FaceTime
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.
it
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It
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make
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makes
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peole
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people
 lack of
opputunity
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opportunity
of
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to
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 connect,
make
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making
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peole
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people
seen
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seem
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 like
starger
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strangers
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grammar
Use good spell and grammar so ideas are clear.
structure
Start each paragraph with a clear main idea and stick to one idea in that paragraph.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so to show flow.
content
Give one or two real and plain examples from life to back a point.
editing
Use short sentences and check common words for errors.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
argument
A view is given at the end.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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