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Many students graduate high school and wish to continue their studies overseas. Outline the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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one
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 hand, many
students
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 today are willing to continue their studies overseas.
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one
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 of the advantages of studying abroad is reviving industrial projects.
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example
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, having
a
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strong communication skills between companies in order to produce a product.
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,
students
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 and specifically designers must understand the culture to earn
the
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a
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 qualified degree in their
certificate
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field
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.
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, culture and life experience
is
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are
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 another factor that creates sensitivity and
positiveness
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while
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 studying outside.
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 as
,
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 learning the
tradition
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traditions
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 of the culture and how people live peacefully.
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,
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facing
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gaining
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 experience by learning something new that
benefit
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benefits
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the
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society too!
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,
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 some
students
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 might face obstacles but they will be
honored
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 to deserve what they achieved.
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, earning a
high quality
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high-quality
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 education is a fabulous thing to benefit both countries.
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example
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, China has different methods of living and teaching,
they
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which
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 depend on their mentality by reading a lot and
work
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working
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 in
handcrafting
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handicrafts
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.
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, the procedure of handling time management and how to become successful
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remain
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remains
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 in their blood since their childhood
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, which
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 is insane!
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,
life
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the life
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 process will not be easy at all.
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one
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 of the disadvantages of studying abroad is that
student’s
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students
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 can not return
back
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apply
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to their families
due to
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 different schedules between
two
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the two
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 countries.
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example
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,
having
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there are
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 different holidays and classes between countries.
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, communication with families will be only through video calls rather than sitting with them face to face.
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, the expensive coast
remain
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remains
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 more than before.
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 as
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 buying expensive food from the store.
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,
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 expensive living
coast
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costs
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 and visas too.
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,
It
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it
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 might not be safe to live alone or without a
bodyguards
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bodyguard
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 because criminals will pop in suddenly without any
hesetation
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hesitation
.
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example
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, if
one
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 of the
students
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 walks alone at night, criminals will attack him by murdering him
maybe
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, maybe
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 because of jealousy or the person is wearing something high-priced.
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,
thiefs
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thieves
 can trick anyone by imitating any character
which
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, which
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is
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it
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 hard to reveal their identity.

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structure
Make a short intro that states the plan and a short end that sums up what you found.
structure
In the middle, give one idea in each paragraph with a small reason or example.
lexical
Use simple and exact words. Check phrases that are not clear or have wrong meaning.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to guide the reader.
language
Fix spelling and grammar that slow down reading. Use correct words for cost, hesitation, etc.
content
You try to show both sides of the topic.
structure
You use linking words such as On the other hand to show contrast.
content
You give some example ideas to support points.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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