The graph below shows the cinema attendace of people on different days of the week in 2003, 2005 and 2007.

The given bar graph illustrates the rate of individuals watching movies at the cinema on various days of

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the

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week in 2003, 2005 and 2007.

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saturdays

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Saturdays

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witnessed the highest percentage of attendance

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whereas

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, whereas

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Monday was the least favoured choice to watch a movie by the public. In 2003, nearly 25% cinema audiences visited on

saturdays

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, which showed a steady growth in the subsequent years to reach a maximum of approximately 28% in 2007. It was followed by Sunday and Friday in the second and third places, respectively.

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, the proportion of people who visited on

sundays

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demonstrated a slight fall in 2005 from nearly 22% in 2003 to 20%,

that

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which

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remained unchanged in the next cohort.

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, the strength of viewers on Friday plateaued at just over 15% over the period of three years.

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mondays

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were not only recorded as the lowest viewership day but

also

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showcased a declining trend:

around

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attendence

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attendance

in 2003

was

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apply

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reduced to 5% by 2007.

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fluctuations in percentages were noted on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday, the figures were below 10%, except for Thursday in 2003 (roughly 11%).

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