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Art classes, like painting and drawing are as important as other subjects, so they should be compulsory subject in high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 courses in schools are as important and
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beneficial
 as other main courses in senior level schools. I definitely agree with
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 I find
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 classes so
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helpful
 for the state of mind and the
creativaty
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creativity
 for an individual.
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, having
highschoolers
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 practise
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this type
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 of subjects
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 will possibly increase the
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 of artists in the
future
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. A great way to get more creative in your job or your
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 life is painting. Practising it activates the creative part of your brain.
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, it
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doesn't
 only make you a better painter, it helps your way of
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thinking
, it benefits the mind, and will get you more focused throughout the day. Many studies show
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 painters and artists have more developed and focused brains than regular people.
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, making younger generations study
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 will make them more passionate about
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. And possibly we will see a great
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 of artists in the
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. Doing so
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 will keep the industry alive and generational. So many people will find talents in that path, and
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potentially
 have the job that makes them happy. In conclusion,
art
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 is great for your health
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 and
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career
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 whatever it is.
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, you can make a living, and build
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fourtane
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fortune
 from it. More
art
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 icons will be found in the
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 as well.
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, I find it an
importnant
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important
 subject.

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar errors. Use plain words and short forms. Make the writing easier to read.
task
Give a clear view in the first part and end with a clear closing sentence. Put one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas, such as also, but, and.
content
Add one or two real examples or facts to back your point, not only general talk.
language
Use shorter lines and fewer long sentence. Check spellings of common words.
content
The writer shows a clear view and stays on topic.
structure
There is some link work and a closing line.
language
The sentences are mostly clear and easy to read.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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