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Buying things online such as books, flight tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of such purchases outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things online is an important issue. It has both positive and negative aspects.
This
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 is saving
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 buying things online
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 books,flight tickets
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 rather than going out for shopping. Another advantage which could be taken into account is comparing prices quickly.
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, it might be difficult to
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compare
 prices in stores and
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 makes shoppers disappointed,
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 it much easier and comfortable.
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, buying online is
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 24 hours.
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, people can buy whenever they want.
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, there are some disadvantages to be taken into consideration. Most significantly is
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, it might take
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makes
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 it boring. Another disadvantage is the quality.
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a study conducted in Egypt in 2020 demonstrated that 65% of individuals who prefer online purchases
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their
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 the quality of the order. In conclusion,I strongly believe that buying online has more advantages than disadvantages.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar so sentences are clear.
lexical
Use simple words to express ideas.
structure
In the intro, give a clear main idea about your view and what you will argue.
content
Add strong, clear examples to back each point and explain how they support your view.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion to discuss both sides.
content
Examples are used to show points about online shopping.
coherence
Linking words like however and for example help flow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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