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Some people feel that we should protect all wild animals. Other people think that only some wild animals should be protected. Discuss both points of view and give your opinon.

It is often debated whether all wild
animals
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 should be equally protected or whether
conservation
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 efforts should focus only on endangered
species
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own view. On the one hand, preserving every
species
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 contributes to the stability of the entire ecosystem. Nature functions as a circular and interdependent system, where each
species
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 plays a role in maintaining ecological balance. If one population grows excessively or declines sharply, it can disrupt the food chain.
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, the Korean tiger
conservation
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 project successfully restored local biodiversity by controlling the number of invasive
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 that threatened native
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.
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, protecting all wildlife helps sustain natural harmony and prevents unforeseen environmental damage.
On the other hand
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, many argue that limited
conservation
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 resources should be directed toward
species
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 that are most at risk of extinction. Since funding and manpower are finite,
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 endangered
animals
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 ensures that these
species
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 do not disappear forever. Losing
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animals
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 could lead to irreversible effects, including disruptions in food chains and even changes in climate patterns.
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, Australia’s targeted protection programs for endangered
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 have increased biodiversity by nearly 60% in recent years. In conclusion, determining how to allocate
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 efforts is vital for maintaining ecological balance. In my opinion,
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 protecting all
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 is ideal, giving greater attention to endangered
species
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 is more practical and necessary, as once they vanish, their loss is permanent.

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task response
Your work shows both sides and has your view, which is good. To raise score, add a quick plan at the start and use linking words to move from one idea to the next.
coherence
Make each idea clear. Give one strong detail for each point and add why the example helps. This keeps the plan steady and helps flow.
structure
Clear end with your view that links to the topic.
development
Two sides are shown and your own view is put forward.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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