You have recently moved to a new city. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter Explain why you moved Describe your new city Tell him/her other news Began your letter as: Dear…

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Dear Sonu, I hope you are in good health. I am excited to share that I have moved to Mississauga, Toronto,

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week. As you know, I was preparing for my master’s for the

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two years, and

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, I cleared my exams and got admission to Toronto University. The university is located in Mississauga near Square One Mall. The city is beautiful and clean. There is a trail with huge maple trees just near to my apartment. Most of the people come for an evening walk there. Here, pollution is very low as compared to my previous city, because everyone travels by public transport. Apart from that, I enjoy the weather here, it’s neither too cold nor too hot. Another good news, I got a part-time job at a hotel. I will be working as a cashier there.

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way I will earn some money for my daily needs. I miss you so much. Hope to meet you soon. Best wishes, Neha

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task achievement

You've done a great job explaining why you moved, describing your new city, and sharing other news. To enhance the response further, consider providing a bit more detail about your experiences or feelings related to each point.

coherence cohesion

While your letter is well-organized, you could improve logical structure by using transitional phrases more often. They help connect ideas smoothly.

greeting and closing

Your greeting and closing are appropriate and create a friendly tone.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph is dedicated to a single idea, which makes your writing clear and easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

163 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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