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The table below shows the annual costs for students to study in masters programmes in three different countries in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the annual costs for students to study in masters programmes in three different countries in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below
illustrates
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apply
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show
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shows
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 the yearly fees for students to study in
masters
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master's
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 programmes in
three
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 different countries in 2007.
Overall
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, computer and science fees were higher than
arts
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 and
business
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 one in
three
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 different countries in 2007.
Besides
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,
conuntry
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country
C
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 had the highest
fee
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 for rent with meals
in
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apply
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out of
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three
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the three
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conuntries
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countries
. In
country
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C
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, there were
three
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 subjects (
arts
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,
business
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, computing )
had
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that had
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 the same
fee
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, with 21,783
USD
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. Meanwhile, in
country
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 B, the computing
fee
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 was higher than
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arts
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the arts
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, with 27,254
USD
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 and 17,200 respectively, followed by 15,698
USD
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 for
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business
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the business
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fee
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.
On the other hand
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, the
country
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 A ’s computing
fee
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 was lower than
computing
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the computing
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fee
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 of 2 different countries, with 18,000
USD
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,
compare
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compared
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 to
business
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, with 14,000
USD
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.
Additionally
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, the lowest subject
fee
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 was
arts
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, with 12,000
USD
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. Science was a subject having the highest
fee
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 in
country
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 A, B,
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and C
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C
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, with 18,000
USD
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, 28,675
USD
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,
24,569
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and 24,569
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USD
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, respectively. Meanwhile, the highest amount of money spent for rent with meal was
country
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C
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, with 17,345
USD
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, followed by 11,256
USD
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conuntry
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country
 B and 8,000
USD
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country
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 A.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, arts, business, c, fee, country, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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