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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes than bying them. What are the advantage and disadvantages of renting a home?

In the prevailing era, the majority of individuals like to rent their apartments
instead
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 of purchasing them.
This
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will
 not only discuss the pros of renting a
home
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, but
also
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 offer insight into
cons
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the cons
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 of
this
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 trend. Commencing with the most salient advantage of renting a house is that it is
cost effective
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cost-effective
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. People normally do not need to pay for repairs of the
equiments
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equipment
and
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 property
tax
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 cannot be paid by a tenant.
This
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 helps them to save some money for other aspirations.
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, in Canada,
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,
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 a tenant usually pays $1800 for
two
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bedroom
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two-bedroom
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 apartment in a city, a
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home owner
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homeowner
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 has to pay more than $4000 monthly
installments
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 plus annual property tax.
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,
this
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 phenomenon can offer them flexibility to move. They are not tied to one location
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 it
convienent
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convenient
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to relocate
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 for a new job, and lifestyle changes.
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,
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 is conducive. Despite its given benefits,
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 cannot be overlooked of rentlal
home
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. The prominent one is that people cannot make significant changes in their
home
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 without taking
landlord's
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 permission,
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 as renovating their
home
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, landscaping, and decorating. The preeminent one is that there are some restrictions in the
home
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 discouraging many. To illustrate, landlords do not give permission to keep pets, and parking in the garage is not permitted in some rented houses in
United
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 States. It forces them to park their car in driveways
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 having
empty
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 garage. So,
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it
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 is destructive to live in a rented house.
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, there are some benefits of having a rental
home
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 because it is less expensive than
owing
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 a
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home
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coupled with
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the easy
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easy
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to relocate
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 for new opportunities. Lack of control and restrictions on properties where they live are the main drawbacks of
this
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 trend.

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development
The essay has a clear plan and uses both sides, but more depth is needed in each idea. Add more detail on how renting affects money, life, and plans. Give a stronger link between ideas.
structure
Make the plan in your head before writing. Use a similar number of ideas in each paragraph. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
grammar
Work on sentence form and grammar. Some words are misspelled or used wrong. Use correct spelling and simple grammar to make ideas clear.
coherence
Use more link words to show order and cause. Words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'so' help the flow from one idea to the next.
content
Clear view on both pros and cons.
example
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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