Some people think that health care should be free for everyone, while others believe that people should pay for their medical treatment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, whether citizens should pay for medical
treatment
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has become a topic of heated debate. Some
people
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believe that it is necessary to pay for medical services,
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others argue that it should be free
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all
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This
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essay will discuss both views and present my own opinion. Supporters of
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that it should pay for medical
treatment
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often argue that free
treatment
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can narrow the gap between the poor and the rich. They claim that everyone has equal access to medical
treatment
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, which not only enhances equality
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but
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provides social justice.
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, countries
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as the UK and Canada have
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provide
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free medical services regardless of citizens' financial situation.
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, it is understandable why some
people
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hold
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view.
On the other hand
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, proponents of individuals who should pay for their medical
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argue that everyone has free medical
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, which will increase
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government
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burden. They believe that free medical services should rely on
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taxes or cutting some areas' budgets,
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as education or infrastructure.
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, in some developing countries,
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as India, which have free medical
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, and
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face
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shortage of doctors or medicines
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insufficient funding.
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, it is clear why others support
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perspective. Personally, I am more inclined to agree with the former/the latter view. One reason is that free medical
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can reduce the
spread
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of disease,
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people
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are more willing to seek early diagnosis and
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, which plays a pivotal role in reducing the
spread
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of infectious diseases.
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, during
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, some countries provided free tests and vaccines to control the
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of
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viruses
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than they did
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. In my view, free medical
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is not only beneficial for individuals but
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safeguards public health. In conclusion, both sides present compelling arguments
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regarding whether health care should be free or not.
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, I believe that medical
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is necessary
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. pay for the government, because that can effectively control and reduce the
spread
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of pandemics.

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task
Plan what you want to say. Write a short plan first. Make your view clear in the start and finish in the end.
cohesion
Use more clear links to join ideas. Use words like first, also, but, so, then.
grammar
Fix miss and fix grammar. Shorten long sentences and be exact.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides.
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It gives some real examples (UK and Canada).
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Your view is said in the middle paragraph.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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