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The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003.

The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003.
The pie chart below
provide
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provides
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 key information
of
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on
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 the
visitors
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betweem th
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between the
Uk
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UK
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 and Spain,
From
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from
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 1983 to 2003.The units
measured
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are measured
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 in
years
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.
This
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 includes
years
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 at about 55 , from 0 to 15 , from 35
to
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apply
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54
,
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apply
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from
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apply
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16 to 24, from 25 to 34 and from 35 to 54
years
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 old.
Overall
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, in 1983, the
highest
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apply
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age
of
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range of
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visitors
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was
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apply
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improved from 35 to 54
years
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 old.
However
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, in 2003, the lowest age of the
visitors
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 was determined
frpm
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from
 16 to 24
years
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 old. On the one hand, in terms of the highest part,
according to
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 the given data.
the
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The
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 highest level of
the
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apply
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visitors
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 was shown in 1983, from 35 to 54
years
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 old, in almost 50%.
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However
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However,
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 the lowest age of
visitors
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 was
determine
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determined
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 in 16 and 24
years
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 old,
in
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at
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 about 4%.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest part,
according to
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 the given data.
the
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The
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 lowest level
;
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apply
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 of
the
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apply
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visitors
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 was shown in 2003, from 0 to 15 and from 16 to 24.
while
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,
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apply
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 the
conistant
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constant
 level was shown from 0 to 15 and from 25 to 34 in almost 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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