Some people believe that people living in the twenty first century have a better standard of living compared to previous centuries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some individuals think that in
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people
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are living with better lifestyles as compared to the
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. I agree with the given statement to a great extent, because of the technological advancements, and development in
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and education
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that will be discussed in
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in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the main
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reason
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that
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why
people
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have a better standard of living in
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's
time
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is technological innovation. In terms of home
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appliances
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as washing machines and dishwashers, with the help of these devices,
people
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will not only be able to complete their home tasks easily, but
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that
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period to complete other important tasks.
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, above mentioned factor is one main
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better
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life in
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time
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. Another
reason
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is
that
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development in
healthcare
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the healthcare
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and education
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sector
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sectors
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. Nowadays, there are more facilities available in case of medical treatments as compared to
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time
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. As in the earlier
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, there were no
treatment
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treatments
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for dangerous
disease
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,
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: Cancer , but
due to
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in
medical
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sector
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,
person
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people
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can
also
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get relief from
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disease as well.
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to it, children can easily continue their studies
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while
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sitting at home with the advent of electronic devices like
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and mobile phones.
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,
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in medical facilities and
education
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the education
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area
also
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prove
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that life is becoming
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better for
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today
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's generation.
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,
due to
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these
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advancement
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in
technological
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sector
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also
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increasing the stress level and health issues amongest
younger
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generation. Because
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young
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people
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people,
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especially
teenagers
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teenagers,
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are spending most of their
time
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in front of
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and mobile phones rather than going outside for exercise and games. In conclusion, in the 21st century, individuals are living
better
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life
due to
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advancement
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advancements
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in
technological
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the technological
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sector
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along
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, along
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with healthcare and
eduaction
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education
. But,
this
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development
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also
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becoming the
reason
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of increment in anxiety
level
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.

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