some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think
maintenance
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that maintaining
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an old building
spent lots
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costs more
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money than
build
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building
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a new
ones
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one
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. The author totally
disagree
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disagrees
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with
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this
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these
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statements. Every building
have
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has
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their
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its
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own function. So, first of all, we have to check the purpose of the building
first
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.
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, if the usage is for house living, it can be hard to demolish it as long as the families still
having
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live there. It’s hard to knock down a building. Some of them hold
thousand
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thousands
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memories
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of memories
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,
for instance
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, an old house of a family should save a story about the family itself, sadness or happiness.
This
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is a psychological reason
actually
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, but some
of
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old people
thinks
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think
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this
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these
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memories should be looked after until they
died
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die
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because they live and grow with
it
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them
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. If we look at
from
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it from
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environmental
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an environmental
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side,
demolish
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demolishing
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a building
contribute
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contributes
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for
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to
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an
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apply
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air, water, and land pollution.
Firstly
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, it can affect
to
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air quality because of concrete dust and ash polluting
air
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the air
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.
This
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is
also
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hazardous for human, especially for their lungs. Concrete dust
contain
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contains
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big, sharp, and chemical
material
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materials
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which can cause cancer. Not only that, concrete
waste
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, wood
waste
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, and any other material
waste
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cannot
reuse
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be reused
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so
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, so
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it can litter the soil,
affected
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affecting
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greenery. Not only that, the process is not easy
as well
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either
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. In the urban area, it’s hard to send a bulldozer or excavator to demolish and bring
waste
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to the
processed
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area.
Then
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, it
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also
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is also
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causing sound pollution for the
neighboorhood
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neighbourhood
,
makes
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making
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them feel
uncomfort
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uncomfortable
and cannot do their activity as usual. In conclusion, the author still
believe
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believes
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that
look
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looking
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after
for
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apply
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an old building
more
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is more
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convenient and
easy
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easier
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than it
cost
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costs
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and
problems
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the problems
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its
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it's
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made.

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task response
Make a plan. Start with a short line that says what you think. Then give 2 or 3 reason. End with a small final line.
cohesion
Make link words to show how ideas go. Use 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so', 'then' to move from idea to idea.
task response
Be sure the task is met. The task asks if we should pull down old builds. Say what you think in the intro and final line.
coherence
Give a clear idea in each part. Each idea needs a simple reason.
content
The writer take a clear side.
content
Some good examples on the time saved and feelings of old homes.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Preservation
  • Restoration
  • Demolition
  • Architectural heritage
  • Cultural significance
  • Tourist attraction
  • Urban landscape
  • Sustainability
  • Conservation
  • Economic benefits
  • Historical landmarks
  • Urban renewal
  • Infrastructure
  • Maintenance costs
  • Modern amenities
  • Building regulations
  • Community identity
  • Heritage conservation
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