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Many teenagers in Europe start working while they are still in school. Some people believe this helps them gain valuable experience and life skills, while others think it interferes with their education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many teenagers nowadays in Europe start working at an early age
while
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 still attending school. The reason behind that may sometimes be the parents who want their children to obtain the knowledge and skills that can only be accumulated through working. There is obviously a point in doing
such
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 things, but I do not entirely agree with working
while
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 being in an educational institution. On the one hand, the benefits of having work experience are highly considered by employers.
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 is because companies always look for people who already know what they are doing, so it will not be an issue to train them in a specific field.
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, statistically, adolescents who worked during their academic years are more successful than those who were only studying at school. Obtaining
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 knowledge early may boost one’s self-confidence and independence,
as well as
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 teach time management and responsibility.
On the other hand
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, teens who try to combine studies and a job may not keep up with either one or both. Not everyone can be at the same time a productive employee
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also
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 maintaining great attendance and high grades in school. Working too much may
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 lead to stress, exhaustion, and a lack of motivation to study. In conclusion,
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 some people think that giving their children work experience is a must, I disagree entirely. I feel that the more students are focused on their subjects, the better they will perform and prepare for their future careers.

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Make your view clear in the intro and keep it the same in the end. Add one or two simple facts or real examples to back each idea.
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Plan is easy to read with clear stance.
strength
There is a good mix of pro and con ideas.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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