IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The images below represent a bookstore in two different periods of time.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the most striking change refers to the Fiction
area
Use synonyms
 which is on the left when coming through the
entrence
Correct your spelling
entrance
. It can be seen that now
this
Linking Words
 whole
area
Use synonyms
was
Wrong verb form
is
show examples
 divided
in
Change preposition
into
show examples
 five parts
Linking Words
such
Punctuation problem
, such
show examples
 as Art, Hobbies, Cookery, Fiction and Non-Fiction.Another noticeable thing is the Cafe
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 can be observed
in
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the right
to
Change preposition
of
show examples
 the Service Desk.
Moreover
Linking Words
, one more
deail
Correct your spelling
detail
 about changes is the tables from the middle of the room that happened to be added
recentally
Correct your spelling
recently
.
Although
Linking Words
 a lot of switches and things were moved throughout
this
Linking Words
 period, some objects have not been touched. One example can be the Service Desk
Punctuation problem
, where
show examples
where
Correct word choice
which
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
can be seen
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the same place as 25 years ago.
As well as
Linking Words
 the Travel
area
Use synonyms
 and the New books
area
Use synonyms
 are in the same spot
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 did not move or
dissapeared
Correct your spelling
disappeared
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: