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Band 4

Some pp believe that public building should be moved out ò the city to promote citizen's well being and better economic growing, while some argue that the planning will cause more harm than good. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The public building is
builded
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built
 for social.
Although
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 moving out
the
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of the
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 public building may promote
citizen's
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citizens'
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well being
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well-being
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 and better economic
growing
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growth
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, the public
build
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building
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 should not be
cancel
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cancelled
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. Some
people
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 in the world are poor and they
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do have
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have not
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not have
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 enough money
support
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to support
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 them to buy different things.Public
building
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buildings
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is
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are
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 like giving them a service and helping them to change their life. Like public library
is providing
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provides
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 a
place
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 and a lot of
book
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books
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 for
people
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.
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people
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People
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 who
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do have
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have not
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not have
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 enough space or environment to study,
public
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the public
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 library
is providing
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provides
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 a quiet
place
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 for them to study.
Also
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, public
library
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libraries
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 provide a
lots
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lot
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 of books for
the
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apply
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people
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 for reference. That's why public
building
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buildings
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is
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are
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 very important. On the other side, moving out
public
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of public
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building
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buildings
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 may promote
citiizen's
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citizens'
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well being
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well-being
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 and better economic
.
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conditions.
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 The public building
waste
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wastes
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 a lot of
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place
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space
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 to build
and
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, and
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it
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there
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 may
have
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be
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 a better way to use
for
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apply
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the
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place
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space
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 to earn more money.
Touriem
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Tourism
 is part of
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an improtant
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improtant indistory
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important industry
 in Hong
Kong
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. using the
place
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 of public
building
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buildings
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 to build more building
that is
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 more attractive
to
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buildings to
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make
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attract
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 more
people
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travel
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to travel
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 to
Hoong
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Hong
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Kong
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 can highly improve the Hong
Kong
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economic
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economy
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. I think the public building should not be moved. The public building is
improtant
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important
 for the poor or homeless guy in the city. If the public building
moved
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moves
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 out ,
the
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apply
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society will have
a
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an
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 irreversible
affect
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effect
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.
Poor
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The poor
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 become
more poor
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poorer
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,
rich
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the rich
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man
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apply
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become
more rich
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richer
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.
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, the public building can be a part of
touriem building
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the tour
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 for attracting the tour
guys
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groups
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.
Now day
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Nowadays
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, the public
building
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buildings
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 are
also
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 very stunning
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, it
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it
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which
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 can
also
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 make the
tour
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tourist
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 guy to travel to Hong
Kong
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 to
looking
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look
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 for the public
building
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buildings
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. That's why
i
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I
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 think the public building should not be moved out.

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task response
Plan with a simple outline before you write. State your view in the first or second sentence.
coherence
Make a clear intro and a short end. Each paragraph should have one main idea and a simple example.
coherence
Use easy link words to show order and cause, such as first, also, but, then, so.
language
Check grammar and fix common errors. Use shorter, clear sentences.
content
The essay shows you think about both sides and you take a clear view at the end.
development
You give simple examples like the library and tourism to support ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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