All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty? Use specific reason and example to explain to your answers.

The team bred LeprCre and Arflox

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lines. In these mice, neurons that respond to leptin had no androgen receptors. Pregnant females later received dihydrotestosterone (DHT

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prenatal androgen exposure; others stayed as controls. They checked body weight, glucose and fat to gauge metabolism, and noted puberty and cycles to follow fertility. At diestrus, they drew blood and took brain tissues for hormone and gene tests and looked at the ovaries under light. Hormones

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by ELISA and LC-MS/MS,

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qPCR. Later, probes for Lepr, Ar and kiss1 showed gene activity in the hypothalamus. Results were shown by two-way ANOVA.

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The piece reads like a set of steps. It does not answer a clear question. To be a good IELTS answer, state the task and give a clear point, plan, and result.

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content

There are clear lab terms and a sequence of steps.

structure

The order of steps is easy to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

102 words

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