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Some people think that school should choose students according to their academic abilities, while others think it is better to have students of different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

In
contemporary
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world
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 governments try to provide equal access to education.It is really vital to create
safe
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a safe
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 and supportive learning environment.
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 it can be argued that schools must opt
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 students according
their
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some
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apply
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academic skills,
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 strongly believe that every child should
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choose
its
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their
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 school despite of different
talent
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talents
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 and capabilities. There are several reasons why some
individual's
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individuals
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 think that schools should
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provide
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Standardized
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 testing and select
children
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 according their
abilities
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.First and foremost,it could be argued that when
children
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 in the same class with similar
abilities
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 can encourage each other,help in some difficult
situation
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situations
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.Another important reason could be
thought
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that it helps to promote
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a cool
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 practice learning environment. Despite the above
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argument
, l tend to believe that individuals should be provided equal access to education.
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 granted ,it could be asserted that
children
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 with different
abilities
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 could be helpful in different situations.
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, in
schools
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schools,
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 introvert and extrovert
children
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 aid each other,accept their differences.They learn how
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to look
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 up to others with different characteristics.Another key sticking point is that some students
loosing
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 motivation can get encouragement and support from pairs.
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,
according to
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 a recent study conducted by Harvard University,
mix
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mixed
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classroom
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classrooms
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 with different
abilities
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 foster lifelong learning habits, cultivate soft skills and their EQ
higher
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is higher
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compare
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compared
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others
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to others
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. In conclusion,people with different characteristics,
abilities
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 always help us to
recognize
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recognise
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others
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others'
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 feelings and emotions,
respect
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and respect
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 everybody.

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task response
Make your view very clear in the start. Say your own view in the first lines and keep with it. Give more clear ideas and real examples that fit the topic.
coherence cohesion
Use good links to join ideas. Start a new idea with a word like also, for example, but. Keep one idea in a paragraph and end with a clear point.
grammar
Check grammer and spelling. Work on verb form and place words right.
content
Use simple, clear examples. Do not use only one study without real fact to back it up.
content
The essay shows some shared view and a clear sense of topic.
structure
There are ideas on how students with different talents can help each other.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic abilities
  • competitive environment
  • homogeneous grouping
  • tailored teaching
  • accelerating learning
  • resource allocation
  • social inclusion
  • stigmatization
  • educational diversity
  • real-world scenarios
  • collaborate
  • varied skills
  • cooperative learning
  • peer teaching
  • inclusive practices
  • learning needs
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