The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in1958 and 2008

The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in1958 and 2008
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in1958 and 2008
The charts compare how European
country’s population’s
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countries ’ populations’
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expenditures on commodities and services were apportioned between 1958 and 2008.
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, the expense is for housing, travel, transport and
,
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luxury goods spending has consistently increased,
while
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spending on other resources has declined or remained unchanged. In terms of commodities, the percentage of spending on housing started at 22% in 1958, and
this
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was followed by a considerable rise to 32% in 2008.
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, household expenses on food
was
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were
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dominated with 32% in 1958, before dropping to 12% in 2008. Turning into the proportion of clothing which was spent by European residents
kept
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remained
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unchanged
with
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at
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10 % between 1958 and 2008.
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, the proportions of spending money on luxury goods, travel and transport started with 7% and 8%, respectively
and
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it
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they
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reached
to
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the same percentage(17%) by experiencing a moderate growth throughout the period. The percentage of people spending on entertainment dipped dramatically from 1958 to 2008, reaching just 9%.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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