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Band 3.5

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Regarding
succes
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success
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sport
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,
people
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divided
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in
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into
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 two different
paradigm
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paradigms
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. Some of them believe that physical
strength
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 is the key
of
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to
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succes
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success
 in
sport
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.
However
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, some
other
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others
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 disagree with that opinion and argue that mental
strength
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 is more important. Since the
basic
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basis
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 of
sport
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 is good physical condition, I lean
to
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towards to
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 argument that
people
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has
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have
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 to be
strong
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physically strong
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in doing
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to do
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sport
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sports
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physically
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apply
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. On one hand, most
people
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 agree that
sport
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based
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is based
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 on good physical condition. So
that
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apply
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,
the
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body
strength
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 is an essential matter in every kind of
sport
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 and
have
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has
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 to be trained
continously
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continuously
. Football players,
for instance
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, need to train themselves
everyday
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every day
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 without pause. The more exercise they do, the more
strength
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 they have.
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,
a
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weak and unprepared athletes will not feel confident to face challenges from the beginning.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that mental
strength
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 will boost physical
strength
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.
For example
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, at the English
Premiere
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Premier
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 League in September 2025, the previous league champion,
Liverpool
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Liverpool,
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 scored two points into Tottenham
Hotspurs
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Hotspur's
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 goal within injury time and
win
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won
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 the game. It shows that
winning
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a winning
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 mentality can lead to calmness and boost body
strength
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 to reach the goal.
This
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 argument is not fully wrong, but
people
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 have to consider
human
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the human
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 body as the
basic
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basis
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in
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for
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 doing
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sport
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sports
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, even for
people
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 with disabilities.
Furthermore
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, mental psychology can be taught
along with
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physical
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the physical
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 process. In conclusion, physical
strength
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 is more important than mental
strength
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, since mental
strenght
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strength
 can be learnt during the process.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about, then two body parts, each with one idea and a short example, and finish with a clear view.
examples
use simple real life examples that fit the point. Avoid dates or facts that you are not sure of.
structure
Link your ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'in addition'. This helps flow from one idea to the next.
language
Check grammar and spell key words like 'success' and 'strength' to be clear.
task
Make sure you answer both views and end with your clear choice.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides and states a view.
structure
The writer uses an example to back a point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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