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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that
newspapers
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 have become outdated because of the popularity of
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internet
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the internet
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. Some
people
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 believe that
newspaper
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 is a thing of the past. From my perspective, I disagree with
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 view.
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 essay will discuss
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 view and give my own opinion.
Newspapers
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 play a vital role in conserving
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people’s
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 spiritual sustenance.
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 is because it is a traditional way to obtain
news
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 throughout the world since the modern society
was established
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, which is a symbol of cultural heritage.
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, numerous
people
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 are fond of collecting kinds of
newspapers
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 all over the
word
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world
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.
People
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 buy
newspapers
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 from
library
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libraries
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 and book stores
and
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, and
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 they prefer the smell of the printed
paper
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.
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, the
newspaper
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 officers persist
developing
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in developing
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 the
paper
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media
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due to
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 it is necessary to preserve the
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newspaper
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newspaper-a
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newspaper-a,
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represent
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a representation
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 of
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people’s
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 heritage.
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,
although
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 the
internet
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 has become more popular, the
newspapers
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are
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have
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 not disappeared. Admittedly, the development of
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internet
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the internet
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 has broken down the progress of
paper
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media
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 significantly. One major reason is that
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internet
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the internet
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 is more convenient to get the newest information, thereby
less
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fewer
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people
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choosing
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choose
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 to wait and buy a
newspaper
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. A clear example is that
people
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 can scroll
in
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on
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 the
internet
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 and gain the latest
news
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 wherever things happen in
native
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their native
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 city or abroad. The
internet
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 guarantees the timeliness of
news
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. Compared with
paper
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media
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, on which you may read the
formal things
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news from
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 several weeks ago, the
internet
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could
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can
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 record the
news
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 of that day. In conclusion,
this
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 trend has raised
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people’s
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 concentration.
However
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, I claim that it could not replace the state of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 for the reason that
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newspaper
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newspapers
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symbolizes
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symbolise
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people’s
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 spiritual sustenance.
It
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There
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 is no denying that
louts
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lots
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 of
people
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 prefer reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and the government encourages
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improving
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 the development of
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paper
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the paper
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media
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.

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Task response
Be clear on your view in the first line. State if you agree or not and what you plan to show.
Task response
Give two or three clear reasons. Use a simple example for each reason.
Coherence
Use one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short line that shows the main idea.
Coherence
Use small link words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
Grammar
Fix bad grammar and wrong words. Check the sentence for errors.
Vocabulary
Use plain words. Do not use hard or long words.
strength
You say you disagree with the view, which shows you take a stand.
structure
The essay has an intro, body, and a end, which fits the task.
content balance
You talk about both sides of the idea, not only one.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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