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Although modern technology has made international communication very easy, many business people still travel long distances to have business meetings. Do the benefits of face to face business meetings outweigh the disadvantages?

In the contemporary era, face-to-face
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meetings
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, even international ones, are still prevalent,
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 advanced technology has made international
communication
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 very easy and convenient. From my perspective,
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 phenomenon exerts more positive effects. One principal reason for
face to face
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 conferences is high efficiency. In
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 situation, the voice and content of speakers can be clearly spread and expressed,
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 outcome may not be achieved online
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unstable
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 wi-fi connection.
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,
offline
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 method can, to a large extent, prevent mutual misunderstanding and enhance
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 efficiency and output.
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, the sense of involvement for participants can be strengthened if choosing face-to-face
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meetings
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. It is easy to divide attenders into small groups where they can brainstorm and discuss freely and openly, which is beneficial for coming up with some creative ideas.
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, when a representative is presenting, it is easy for others to interrupt and question to trigger deep thinking and thereby find out superior remedies. These flexible discussions,
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, are elusive to achieve through online
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.
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 these benefits of face-to-face
business
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 conferences are compelling, it is undeniable that they
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 have some drawbacks. The main one is high expenditure for both holders and participants, including renting appropriate venues, paying for accommodation, and spending on transport.
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, only by selecting online
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 all these expenditures not exist at all.
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, in my view, it is just these costs both parties are willing to pay that sufficiently illustrate that they value
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 meeting, so it is exceptionally conducive to reaching a consensus regarding some contentious issues and even contributing to some major
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 cooperations. In conclusion, face-to-face international
business
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meetings
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 are meaningful and have more positive aspects as they can improve the sense of involvement and
communication
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 efficiency.

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