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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
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 table gives data on figures of people who are
imprison
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imprisoned
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 in five countries between 1930 and 1980.
great britain
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Great Britain
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 was around 25% in 1930
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australia
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Australia
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 was 70% .
new zealand
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New Zealand
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 and
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the united
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united
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United States
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states
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 were the same
and
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 they were 100%.
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canada
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Canada
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 was 120% in 1930.
in
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In
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1940
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1940,
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canada
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Canada
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 and
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the united
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united
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United States
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states
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were
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increased
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while
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 three figures decreased slightly.
great britain
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Great Britain
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 was 40%,
australia
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Australia
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43
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was 43
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%, and
new zealand
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New Zealand
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 was 45% in 1950.
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The united
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united
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United States
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states
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 was about 105% AND
CANADA
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 WAS 115%. IN
1970
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1970,
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 THREE FIGURES WERE THE SAME
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 THEY WERE 65% AND UNITED
STATES
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 WAS ABOUT 95% AND
CANADA
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 WAS 100%. great britain was 82%, australia was 50 % , new zealand was 85% .
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canada
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Canada
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 was 90% and
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the united
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united
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United States
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states
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 was the highest
it
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 was 135% in 1980.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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