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The charts give information about world forest in five different regions. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about world forest in five different regions. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
These charts display the world
forest
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 percentage and
amount
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the amount
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 of
timber
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 wood in five
various
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apply
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continents.
Overall
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, Africa had a larger
areas
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area
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 of
forest
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, but the
timber
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 production had
the
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a
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 lower amount
that
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than
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 other regions.
In addition
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, North
America
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 had the biggest number of wood
almost
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, almost
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 similar
with
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to
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 its
forest
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 area. About 27% nature area in the
world
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world's
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 was from Africa's
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forest
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forests
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, followed by North
America
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 with one-fourth of all.
Then
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, the rest of the countries,
that
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which
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 were Europe, South
America
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, and Asia, gave almost similar
percentage
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percentages
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 to the world nature
which
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, which
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 were 18%, 16%, and 14% respectively. Different
for
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from
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recent
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the recent
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 chart, the right chart showed that North
America
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 lead 30% number of
timber
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 production.
Furthermore
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, South
America
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's
timber
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 was 7% lower than Europe.
Moreover
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, Asia and Europe
almost had
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had almost
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 similar
percentage
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percentages
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about
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of about
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 one-fourth. As we can see, both of them did not have
a
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apply
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big differences between
forest
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 areas and
timber
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 results.
Lastly
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, Africa became the least
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timber
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timber-producing
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production
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region
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 with just 9%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words forest, timber, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • afforestation
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • sustainable
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sequestration
  • land use
  • temperate
  • tropical
  • subtropical
  • arid
  • degradation
  • reforestation
  • habitat
  • old-growth
  • primary forest
  • secondary forest
  • logging
  • environmental policy
  • climate mitigation
  • carbon footprint
  • flora and fauna
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