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The pictures illustrate a number of important changes which took place in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power down.

The diagrams show the changes in a town between 1990 and 2010 after the construction of a hydroelectric power
dam
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. They highlight transformations in land use, natural features, and infrastructure.
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, the construction of the
dam
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 significantly altered the landscape. The natural environment, including forests and farmland, was replaced by a large artificial lake. Infrastructure related to electricity production expanded, and new buildings
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such
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, such
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 as a
hotel
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hotel,
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 appeared. The villages remained but shifted slightly. In 1990, the town was
characterized
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 by extensive natural features, including forests, rare plants and animals, ancient structures, and irrigated farmland. The river ran through the
center
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centre
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, with villages located on the eastern side and mountains surrounding the area.
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 indicates a mostly rural and natural environment focused on agriculture and preservation. By 2010, the landscape
changed
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had changed
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 drastically after the
dam
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 was built. A large lake was formed, flooding the previous farmland. The hydroelectric
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 was constructed on the river, supplying electricity, which is shown by several electrical towers in the west. Villages remained near the river, and a hotel was built near the lake, suggesting development in tourism. The forest and rare plants disappeared, showing environmental impact.

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Give one clear big idea at the start and then tell what was there in 1990 and what it was in 2010.
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Use short and easy lines. Try to keep one idea in each sentence.
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Say what changed in land, water, and built things like roads and houses and hotels.
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Use the same words for the same thing, like lake or dam, so no mix of ideas.
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End with a short end line that sums up how the place changed.
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Clear plan with 'In 1990' and 'By 2010' parts.
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Good use of examples like lake and dam and hotel.
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The main idea is easy to see.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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