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Band 2

People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views and give your idea.

Many
belive
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believe
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 that some
people
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 are gifted with
leadership
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future
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potential
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,
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.
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However
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, Others argue that
leadership
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 can be gained
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 In my opinion, I
belive
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believe
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 that both views are equally right.
on
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 the one hand,
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belived
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believed
 by some
people
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 that these types of
exiptional personalitys
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exceptional personalities
is
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are
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completley
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completely
 gifted
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.
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 In fact,
Not
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not
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 every leader
have
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has
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a
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apply
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leadership
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skils
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skills
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,
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. In
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in addition
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, a study published by
new york university
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New York University
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 concluded that 35% of those who have an
exeptional
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exceptional
leadership
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 have been
a
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apply
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great leaders since
there
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their
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 youth.
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on
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 the other hand, other
people
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 argue that
development
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developing
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 personality
including
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, including
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leadership
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skills
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skills,
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are
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compleatley reagular
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completely regular
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, I used to have communication trouble
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 Ever since improving that skill, I have been a great leader as well
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Furhermore
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Furthermore
, I have been getting
complemnts
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compliments
 that
i
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I
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 have
a
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apply
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good
manage
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skillls
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skills
,
leadership
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 as well
,
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.
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As a result
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,
Development
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developing
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 a
charecter
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character
 can lead to
impressing
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impressive
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 results.
Its
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It's
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belived
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believed
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people
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 that
exiptional
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exceptional
 skills are
completley
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completely
 gifted,
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While
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while
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other
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others
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 disagree and say that
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they could
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could
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can
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 be
gaind
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gained
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.
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 In my opinion, some
people
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 were born with ordinary skills, and others improved themselves to reach
there
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their
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 goal.

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planning
Plan your answer with a short plan: intro, two body parts, and a brief end.
structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and start each with a simple topic sentence.
language
Check spelling and use easy, clear word choices.
content
If you use a fact, make it clear and easy to trust.
conclusion
Finish with a clear view that matches your plan.
content
The text tries to talk about two sides.
coherence
Link words like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' are used.
content
There is an idea that leadership can be learned.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • born
  • natural
  • nurture
  • nature
  • learn
  • training
  • practice
  • experience
  • grow
  • improve
  • plan
  • goal
  • decision
  • talk
  • listen
  • team
  • club
  • mentor
  • feedback
  • chance
  • environment
  • effort
  • example
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