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Band 3

Some people believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high-level degrees Do you agree or disagree?

In the career market, one may notice that salaries
fulctating
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fluctuate
depanding
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depending
 on many factors.
However
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, many people believe physical
labor
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labour
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 should be paid in
ties
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terms
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with
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of
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 high-level
degrees
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degree
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 careers. In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on both sides of the argument and present my opinion in the end.
Firstly
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, people believe that your salary should be
depandent
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dependent
 on the effort you
exhaust
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with
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into
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 your physical body, not
with
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on
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 the value you put out in the world.
Secondly
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, they believe physical
labor
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labour
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 is
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and
therefore
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 will prevent workers from achieving
stable
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a stable
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 family and
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a content
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content
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 life.
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, payment should
in
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be in
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 par with the scarifies demanded by physical
labor
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labour
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.
On the other hand
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, people will argue that workers with higher
education
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 should always be paid more.
For example
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, the salary for
MA
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an MA
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 graduate should be significantly higher than the salary of a BA graduate.
Firstly
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, they believe knowledge will always outweigh
hand
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hands-on
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 experience.
Secondly
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, they argue that MA and PHD graduates have more patience as their
education
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 taught them to be more
displanced
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disciplined
.
Finally
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, higher
education
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 will make them
a
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apply
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better problem solvers. In conclusion, I believe that
education
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 is the key to unlocking
world's
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the world's
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 problems.
However
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, I
also
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 think that some lessons in life are never taught within the walls of schools. Rather, they are learned through hardships and tangible experiences.

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task response
Plan with a clear map. Have an intro, two body parts, and a short end. Put one clear idea in each paragraph and use linking words like first, then, also, but, however.
coherence cohesion
Improve link and flow in the text. Use simple linking words to show steps and how ideas go from one point to the next.
content quality
The essay shows both sides and a clear view.
structure
The ending shows what the writer thinks.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compensation
  • Manual labor
  • Academic qualification
  • Underappreciated
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Wage disparity
  • Skillset
  • Monetary recognition
  • Job market
  • Economic contribution
  • Labor-intensive
  • Educational attainment
  • Remuneration
  • Income equality
  • Cost of living
  • Vocational training
  • Meritocracy
  • Professional development
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