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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below the poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below the poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates details about age,average
income
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 per person,
as well as
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 population below the
poverty
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line
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 in three cities in the USA.
Overall
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, the data demonstrates the presence of people aged under 18 and over 60 in different proportions from one state to another across both criteria ,which are the average
income
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 and the population under the
poverty
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line
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. In detail, in Utah
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28% of
paticualrs
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participants
 are minors, followed by California 17% and Florida 16% ,
while
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 Florida contains the highest proportion of people aged over 60 years old , approximately fixed at 23% compared to
california
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California
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, 13% and Utah , with only 8% .
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, California lead the race in
term
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 of average
income
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 per person with 23000$ and the population below
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poverty
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the poverty
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line
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 with 16% which is the highest share compared with Florida and Utah , where the average
of
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income
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 is 22000$ and $17000 % respectively , and the percentage of citizens below the
poverty
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line
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 is 12% and 9%. In conclusion , the percentage of each criterion varies
between
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from
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 one state to another .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, poverty, line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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