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The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Aaustralia universities in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Aaustralia universities in 2001 and 2010
The given diagrams illustrate the number of
students
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 who were enrolled in research programs in Australian universities in the years 2001 and 2010.
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, both the local and international
students
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' enrollment increased in 2010. Foreign
students
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' female percentage increased in 2010,
while
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,
on the contrary
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, the percentage of Australian females who were research
students
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 decreased in 2010. There were 38,849
students
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 in research programs in 2001;
this
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 total increased to 54,081 by 2010. Compared to local, their foreign counterparts approximately tripled, from just above 5000 in 2001 to almost 15000 in 2010. In 2001, 87% of the total
students
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 were local. The amount was reduced to just under three-quarters by 2010.
On the other hand
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, International student numbers increased by more than double, at 27% by 2010. The most significant change was the female proportion of international
students
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, which rose to 15% in 2010, from just 4% of the total in 2001.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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