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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
The chart compares the annual numbers of tourists to three museums in London from 2007 to 2012.
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, all three museums experienced
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fluctuations in visitor numbers between 2007 and 2012.
While
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 one museum showed a steady increase over the period, the others showed a more variable
trends
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 with some rise and fall in attendance. In 2007, the National Gallery
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 recorded the lowest participation rate of tourists at around 6
million
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however
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, over the years,
this
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 figure climbed rapidly until it reached almost 16
million
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 in 2012 and became the greatest among others.
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, the Victoria and Albert museum
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 recorded the highest amount for the same year, nearly
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double
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 to 13
million
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 people, which continued with the same figure in the following year, before falling sharply to approximately 8
million
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 in 2009 and ending up with 10
million
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 visitors in 2012.
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, the British Museum experienced a dramatic decline from 12
million
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 in 2007 to nearly
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half in 2008. In the following years, it presents a gradual growth in the attendance rates, ending up second place with close to 15
million
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 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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