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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
The bar chart illustrates the predicted
illireracy
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illiteracy
 rates in different places (Developed Countries, Latin American/Caribbean, East
Asia
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/Oceania*, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South
Asia
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) for
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in the span of one year. As reflected by the y-axis, the percentage is measured from o to 60 with intervals of 10. In general, it can be clearly seen that in every region ,
women
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's
illiteracy
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 rates are much higher than
guy's
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men's
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. The place with the highest
illiteracy
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, both male and female, is South
Asia
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.
However
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, Developed Countries have the lowest units of
illiteracy
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. In more detail, unschooled males in Developed Countries numbered around 1%, but
women
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 slightly more , around 2%.
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, American
men
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's and
women
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's
illiteracy
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 rates were pretty similar, 10% for guys and around 12% for girls.
On the other hand
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, percentage of females who can't ride or read in East
Asia
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/Oceania* was more than two times higher than
men
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's, 20% for girls and about 8% for
men
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.
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,
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 was
also
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 seen in the Sub-Saharan region, where almost half of the
women
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, around 48%, were illiterate, as for fellow it was only 31%.
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, in Arab States, the numbers for
men
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 were similar, 29% of the
men
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 could not write or read, as for females, aproximately 52% of them had
this
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 problem. South
Asia
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 had the highest percentage of illiterates

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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, women, illiteracy, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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