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The maps show how the industrial area will change into a housing area in the future.

The maps show how the industrial area will change into a housing area in the future.
The given maps highlight how an industrial area will be converted into a housing complex
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 in the future.
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,
it is clear that
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 the area will undergo significant changes, with the removal and addition of some facilities. Looking at the initial map,
firstly
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, the place is covered with roads. At the top of the layout, there is an entrance and a reception.
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, on the south
side
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, there are six offices, with a canteen. Moving to the left
side
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, there are two buildings: packing and storage, and a huge factory on the east
side
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. Looking at the remaining diagram, it is evident that all constructions in the manufacturing space will be replaced with new housing,
while
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 the main road will remain unchanged.
According to
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 the plan, there will be two parking locations, one of
them
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 will be with garages, at the bottom,
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 the second one will be small, on the south-east corner of the plan, and on the right
side
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 will be apartments. Packing and storage will be replaced with three and four-bedroom houses.
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, 3 two-bedroom buildings will be built,
instead
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 of the entrance and reception.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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