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Band 3.5

It is possible to judge people by their appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagtrr with this statement?

Some
people
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 think that they can assess
another
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people
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 just by looking at them. Evaluating someone’s character without even having a conversation with that
person
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 is what many
people
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 do. I accept that sometimes we can judge someone just by looking at them. But I disagree that we can do that all the time. It is difficult to justify the claim that judging someone only by their outlook demonstrates real personality or skills. Everyone can wear
sporcostumes
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sports costumes
, but they won’t make them Olympic
champion
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champions
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.
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, some of my classmates think that a girl from
group
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the group
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 is always depressed or angry, just because of her dark outfits.
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, she is
really
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a really
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 kind and interesting
person
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 with whom it’s easy to communicate.
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However
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 there is overwhelming evidence to support that
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 trying not to judge
people
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 by their appearance, we still
inevitable
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doing
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 it. When we see untidy or homeless persons, first what we recognise is nasty clothes or dirty skin. That leads to us not starting a conversation eagerly. Even if
this
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person
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 might be kind and smart, we won’t think about that
while
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 talking, because our comfort will be more important at that moment.
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,
while
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 the statement is good from both sides, it should be considered within a
broarder
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broader
 framework. In
this
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situation
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situation,
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 I’m more
disagree
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in disagreement
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 than
agree
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, because our comfort, or our own feelings, shouldn’t judge a
person
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.

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task response
You answer the task and show your view. To raise score, keep your main point in the first paragraph and stay with it. Add one clear idea per paragraph and use a reason or example for it.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas are there, but they flow a bit fast. Use linking words to show how ideas join. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that tells the goal. End with a short conclusion.
lexical resource
Some words are not right or are odd (for example sporcostumes and broarder). Use simple, common words you know. Check spellings.
grammar
There are mistakes with verb form, plural and tense. Use simple present for general facts and simple past for examples. Check subject-verb agreement.
punctuation
Punctuate well. Use a period at the end of each sentence. Use commas to join ideas inside a sentence. Capitalize the start of each new sentence.
content
Clear attempt to state a view with some nuance.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present and use good structure.
examples
Some real examples are given to support points.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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