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The news company is going to start a new program on TV about a particular place. Write a letter to offer your suggestions on what the program should be like. In your letter, you should tell: how you know about that place what suggestions you would like to make why you are offering these suggestions.

Dear Sir/ Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well
,
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.
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 I am writing to you in connection with the new program based on Toronto Place,
you
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which you
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 are going to telecast on your channel, BBC News. I lived in the city for four years
and
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, and
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 it is always a pleasure to keep hearing about the new updates happening there. I was reading about the show and found out that it is going to cover all the popular visiting places
historical
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, historical
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 buildings
and
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, and
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 museums, but as an
audiance
Correct your spelling
audience
 I would
also
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 like to know about the different types of food
cusines
Correct your spelling
cuisines
 available in the area and their reviews. I have been watching your channel for many years now. I
belive
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believe
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 it is one of the best channels that
telecast
Correct subject-verb agreement
telecasts
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 the latest information
on
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in
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the
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a
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 timely manner.
Moreover
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, for the new
show
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show,
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 there were some suggestions asked, so I
also
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 wanted to share my views on it. I hope you
would
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will
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 like and consider my ideas. Yours sincerely Lovprit Kaur

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content
Add a clear plan for the show. Name 2-3 ideas for segments.
organization
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Start a new paragraph for a new idea.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, like 'also', 'for example', 'next'.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Correct 'audiance' to 'audience', 'belive' to 'believe'.
tone
Keep a formal tone. Use 'Dear Sir/Madam' and 'Yours sincerely' with your name.
content
The letter shows the writer's reason to write and its goal.
structure
The closing and opening are formal.
tone
The writer gives a reason why they share ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • place
  • city
  • town
  • coast
  • lake
  • river
  • mountain
  • old
  • new
  • people
  • local
  • visit
  • show
  • plan
  • idea
  • simple
  • easy
  • good
  • best
  • talk
  • interview
  • story
  • food
  • culture
  • life
  • work
  • time
  • day
  • night
  • view
  • sound
  • image
  • film
  • season
  • budget
  • help
  • guest
  • teacher
  • shop
  • market
  • school
  • family
  • safe
  • respect
  • local guide
  • permission
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