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Nowadays a lot of information about medical conditions and illnesses is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Recently , plenty of health related topics including medical stasus and diseases become easily accsessible throught internet . I firmly belive that
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 can be a excellent learning manner if used in accurate way .
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 , I
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 agree that it could be wrong approach if the information was incorrect .
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 with, advanages of the ability to find the medical knowledge that has been published on the internet include helping patients to explore more about their general health condition , medications , drugs interactions, signs and symptoms and some recommended advices .
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 : patients who has diabetes and obesity can find great recommendations about how they can follow a healthy lifestyle which contains : eating healthy food , avoiding high suger intake and doing a regular exercises .
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 , people who have flu can look for helpful natural hot drinks
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 as genger .
In contrast
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 , there are many wrong and inaccurate medical data uploaded on the websites .
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 : some unreliable websites argue that some whitening materials can be safely used without ant side effects and without perscriptions. wherease in fact the recent studies show that some whitinig material can leads to many complicatons
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 as enamel abrasion and it
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 cause rough enamel surface . In conclusion , in order to get the maximum benifit from medical informations that are availabe in websites or social media , people should search for informations only in trusted resources and better to find
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 some studies that support these health informations .
Also
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 , avoiding unreliable resourses specially that are in social media .

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structure
Make the plan before you write. Start with a short intro, then two or three clear ideas in their own paragraphs, then a short ending.
grammar
Use simple and correct grammar. Check spellings and hard words to avoid wrong facts.
vocabulary
Give clear examples for each idea. Use easy facts from life you know.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are related, like first, also, however, for example.
content
You say both good and bad sides of online health info.
content
You give real examples like how people can learn about diet and drugs.
analysis
You show that bad info can be harmful, and you say this.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • internet
  • health
  • info
  • fact
  • source
  • trust
  • wrong
  • risk
  • safe
  • help
  • doctor
  • patient
  • read
  • see
  • use
  • plan
  • claim
  • evidence
  • example
  • clear
  • time
  • easy
  • talk
  • check
  • true
  • false
  • fear
  • care
  • site
  • advice
  • proof
  • careful
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