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The bar graph shows the average hours of daily sunshine throughout the year in two cities of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the average hours of daily sunshine throughout the year in two cities of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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overall
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overall,
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 it can be seen that
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perth
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Perth
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 had
longest
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the longest
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hours
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 of sunshine during
first
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the first
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 and
last
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 three months of
year
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the year
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,
while
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sydney
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Sydney
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 accounted for
least
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the least
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hours
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. By looking into more details in
january
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January
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,
Sydney
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allocated for
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received
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 8
hours
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 of sunshine, and
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perth
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Perth
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 about 11
hours
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, from february
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. From February
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 to
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April
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april
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april,
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 there was just above 8
hours
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 of constant natural light in
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sydney
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Sydney
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, but in
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Perth
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perth
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perth,
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 it was 10
hours
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 in
february
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February
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 and about 9 and 7
hour
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hours
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 in
march
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March
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 and
april
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April
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
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However
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However,
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 in the
month
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months
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 of
may
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May
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, june
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june
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June
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and
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, and
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july
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July
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both
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, both
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 cities accounted for
same
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the same
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hours
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 of sunshine
around
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, around
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 six
hours
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,
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. Later
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later
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later,
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 the number of
hours
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 increased gradually in
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perth
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Perth
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 from
august
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August
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 to
december
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December
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from
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, from
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 about 5
hours
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 to around 11
hours
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.
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Meanwhile
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meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 it remained
same
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the same
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 in
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sydney
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Sydney
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 to exactly 8
hours
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 from
august
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August
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 to
december
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December
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words perth, hours, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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