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Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people freedom to travel further.Howeverothers think this leads to environmental problems, so air trave should be more expensive in order to discourage people from travelling by air.Discuss both sides an give your own opinion.

Alot
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A lot
 of
people
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 believe that affordable
airplane
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aeroplane
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travel
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 should get help
by
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from
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 the government or other
authority
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authorities
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 to be helpful with them
to
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apply
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increase the ability for many
poeople
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people
 to
travel
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 easily.
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, there
some
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are some
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poeple
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people
argue
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who argue
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 that
air
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travel
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 shouldn'
t
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 be cheap
so
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, so
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,
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apply
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people
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 couldn'
t
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travel
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 as
easy
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easily
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 as the
comparision
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comparison
 idea
want
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suggests
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. I believe that
air
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travel
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 should be easy
to
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for
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people
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 to
travel
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 without any handicaps
but
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, but
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 with
take
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apply
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care for the
environment
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health
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and health
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 to make
this
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 significant
arguement
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argument
 balanced. On the first hand, making
the
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apply
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airplane
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aeroplane
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travel
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 easy and cheap is essential
due to
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 various reasons. There
is
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are
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somepeople
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some people
can'
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who can't
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t
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 visit
his
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their
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family
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families
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due to
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 the
expensive
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expense
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 of
travel
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ticket
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tickets
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.
Therefore
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, they can communicate just by phone
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, that
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that
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which
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will
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can
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 damage their psychological
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as
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well-being as
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 well as negative feelings.
For instance
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, the family in
developing
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a developing
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 country
hasn'
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doesn't
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t
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the
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have the
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 ability to visit their child who
study
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studies
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 in the UK.
As a result
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,
government
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the government
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 should encourage the airline companies to make
the
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apply
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travels
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travel
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 affordable for poor families.
On the other hand
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, making
the
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apply
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air
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travel
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 easy for everyone will damage
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environment
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the environment
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 in a bad way. So, the world will suffer from polluted
air
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and
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which
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 will lead to environmental
problem
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problems
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. The solution for
this
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 issue is to make
the
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apply
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air
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travel
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 more expensive
to get
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,
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and
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which
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 will decrease the number of
planes
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 in the sky.
As a result
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, the protection of the
environment
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 will increase by decreasing the number of
air
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 travels.
To sum
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up
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up,
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 I believe that
air
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travels
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travel
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 should be available for entire
people
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but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 the
responsable
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responsible
 authorities should protect the
environment
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 by making
the
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apply
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electric
planes
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instead
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 of oil
planes
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.
Therefore
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,
people
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 can
travel
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 anywhere they want without damaging the
air
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by
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with
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planes
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plane
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 smoke.

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task
Be clear with your main idea in the first sentence of each paragraph, and stay with it.
coherence
Use simple connects to show how ideas fit together, such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'therefore'.
examples
Give one strong example for each point to back up your view.
language
Check spelling and grammar to make your words clear.
content
You show two sides and give your view.
context
There is an idea of a real case (family in UK) in the text.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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