Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in theirexams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

3-The authors thought that human embryonic stem
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could be nudged along an endoderm path that echoes how the pancreas forms. If that path holds, the
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would end up as pancreatic endocrine
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with insulin storage and release close to that of adult islets. Earlier ES-cell work was patchy. In many
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the
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held little insulin, showed neural traits or never showed a clear link to endoderm. From here, the group sketched a tighter route, rooted in normal pancreatic development, as their way towards more functional β-like
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coherence
Try to show a clear plan at once. Start with a small intro, then add a few ideas in order, and finish with a short ending that wraps up.
coherence
Work on giving an intro and a short end to your piece so the reader sees a clear path.
cohesion
Link your ideas with simple words like first, next, and also, so the text flows better.
task
Explain more on what the author tries to do and why the path matters, so the task is clearer.
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Give more clear examples and make sure each point ties to the main idea.
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The text shows a good idea of how stem cells may move in a path
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Details like insulin and β-like cells are mentioned
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic excellence
  • incentive
  • motivation
  • competitive spirit
  • growth mindset
  • innate ability
  • effort
  • improvement
  • inclusive
  • recognition
  • achievement
  • progress
  • struggle
  • balance
  • inclusive learning environment
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