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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some of the
people
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 who are going to university take a break before starting university
because of
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for
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 pleasure.Many
people
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 believe that it is
excellent
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an excellent
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 idea
while
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 others
thinks
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think
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 it is a waste of
time
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 taking a break is
really
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a really
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 good idea for me . Starting university is truly an important turning point in
human's
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a human's
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 life. Because everything is not
easy
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as easy
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 as when u are going to high school.Especially if you choose a difficult major. You always have homework, projects,
assigments
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assignments
.You
dont
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don't
 have
time
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 for yourself.Some
people
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 prefer to take a gap to travel or work .Since they know that you
dont
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don't
 have enough
time
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 after starting. Both of them
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have
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 a lot of benefits for
people
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such
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, such
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 as being mature and independent. When young
people
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 travel or
work
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work,
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 they face real-life situations that teach them responsibility.
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 a student who works during a gap year learns how to manage money, communicate with different
people
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, and solve problems on their own.
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, breaking
time
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an
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apply
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also
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help
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helps
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studentsdiscover
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students discover
 what they want to study. Many teenagers choose a
depertmant
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department
 without understanding
theris
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their
 interests. It is
reaaly
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really
 early
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time
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apply
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to choose
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, and
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 they have
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the opputinity
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opputinity
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opportunity
 to think
what
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about what
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 they want,
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which is
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is
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are
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the
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their
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 goals. If you want to study
some
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a
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major
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major,
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 you will go to work somewhere
that is
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 about major
and
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, and
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this
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 experience shows
the
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apply
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how much you want
.
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it.
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In addition
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 , after high school
students
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, students
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 feel exhausted and want to travel
for resting
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to rest
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. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 believe that
gap
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a gap
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 year is
amazing
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an amazing
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 option for students.If students use
time
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 to learn,explore or improve themselves , it can be an experience that helps them
succed
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succeed
 in
unversity
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university
 and life.

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task response
State a clear view in the opening and stick to it. Add one or two main ideas and back them with a simple example.
coherence cohesion
Make each idea start a new paragraph and link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, and then.
content
The essay shows a real attempt to give reasons and an example.
content
The idea that a gap year can help with real life skills is clear.
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