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We can learn everything about the past from the drama in films and on television. Therefore, we no longer need to read historical books. To what extent do you agree or disagree about this statement.

Some people argue that
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history
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 can be discovered through cinema or television
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.
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, citizens tend to think that reading is obsolete, and there is no longer
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 books. I partly disagree with
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 conviction, and
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 essay will examine both views.
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 with, nowadays films and
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 about historical events have several clear advantages. To
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exemplify
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, they present complex series in a vivid and memorable way.
For example
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, battles, revolutions or political negotiations become easier to imagine when they see them performed by actors with realistic costumes and settings.
In addition
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, historical dramas often reach audiences who would never open a
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 book,
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 as teenagers or busy adults. In
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 sense, visual media can serve as a useful introduction to the past and can inspire individuals to learn more.
On the contrary
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, relying only on dramas is highly problematic.
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most films are created for entertainment and profit, not for education.
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 that, directors may simplify events, change timelines or
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exaggerate
 conflicts in order to create a more dramatic story.
As a result
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, viewers may develop a distorted picture of what actually happened.
Second,
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historical novels, especially those written by professional historians, usually provide references, multiple perspectives and detailed explanations of causes and consequences.
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 level of accuracy and critical analysis is rarely found in popular media. Ultimately, without books, our understanding of
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 would be shallow and easily influenced by commercial interests or political agendas. In conclusion,
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 drama in movies and on media channels can play an important role in sparking interest in
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, it can not replace historical literature.
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, both forms should complement each other, but serious knowledge about the past still depends on careful reading of written sources.

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language
Fix small grammar and spelling errors to make your point clear.
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Use linking words to show how ideas are linked.
structure
Give one clear view and stick to it, then give a few strong examples.
structure
Balance each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and end with a point.
content
You give both sides and a final take, which shows control of task.
content
Intro and conclusion are present, and you use examples to back points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • history
  • films
  • television
  • drama
  • learn
  • read
  • books
  • past
  • understand
  • events
  • story
  • life
  • young
  • audience
  • interest
  • view
  • visual
  • act
  • setting
  • entertainment
  • understanding
  • fact
  • analysis
  • perspective
  • time
  • accurate
  • characters
  • choose
  • engage
  • accuracies
  • creative
  • depict
  • represent
  • liberties
  • importance
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