Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
There is a view that in rural but with some saying that in urban
areas
healthy Use synonyms
lifestyle
is not difficultUse synonyms
Punctuation problem
,
Use synonyms
areas
there are more benefits of Punctuation problem
areas,
Correct article usage
a helathy
helathy
Correct your spelling
healthy
lifestyle
. Use synonyms
in
my Fix capitalization
In
opinoin
, in the countryside there are many healthy benefits.
Correct your spelling
opinion
a
large number of Fix capitalization
A
people
think that there are many healthy benefits of living in Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
Linking Words
for
example, currently in urban Fix capitalization
For
areas
medical system is developed and Use synonyms
people
can Use synonyms
take
Verb problem
get
cure
easily for their Replace the word
cured
healthy
. Replace the word
health
Linking Words
in
addition, many private hospitals opened Fix capitalization
In
and
there are a Punctuation problem
, and
lot
of doctors who are Use synonyms
good qualified
. Use the right word
well-qualified
they
have good knowledge. Fix capitalization
They
so
,Fix capitalization
So
thats way
some Use the right word
that's why
of
Change preposition
apply
people
think it is difficult to have Use synonyms
Correct article usage
a healty
healty
Correct your spelling
healthy
lifestyle
in Use synonyms
vilages
. Correct your spelling
villages
Linking Words
however
, in Fix capitalization
However
cities
Use synonyms
also
some Linking Words
drawback
. Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
Linking Words
for
instance, Fix capitalization
For
in
many Change preposition
apply
people
have Use synonyms
sedentary
Correct article usage
a sedentary
lifestyle
and Use synonyms
it
can cause obesity.
Correct pronoun usage
which
in
urban Fix capitalization
In
Use synonyms
areas
it is easier to have Add a comma
areas,
healthy
Correct article usage
a healthy
lifestyle
because they have no sedentary Use synonyms
Use synonyms
lifestyle
a Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
lot
. Use synonyms
Linking Words
also
, in Fix capitalization
Also
Correct article usage
the countryside
countryside
has Punctuation problem
countryside,
fresh
Correct word choice
fresher
but
in Punctuation problem
, but
Use synonyms
cities
the air is more polluted by cars and factories. Add a comma
cities,
poeple
of Correct your spelling
People
village
Correct article usage
the village
they
do Correct pronoun usage
apply
no eat not
a Rephrase
not eat
lot
Use synonyms
fast
food because Change preposition
of fast
therer
is no Correct your spelling
there
developed
in Replace the word
development
such
kind of places where Linking Words
prepared
junk foodVerb problem
apply
.
Verb problem
is prepared.
so
in urban Fix capitalization
So
areas
there is no obesity and Use synonyms
and
pollution a Correct word choice
apply
lot
compared Use synonyms
wit
Change preposition
to
cities
. Use synonyms
there
Fix capitalization
There
Linking Words
also
medicine developed Verb problem
is also
they
can take Correct pronoun usage
that
good
cure.
Correct article usage
a good
in
conclusion , every place has Fix capitalization
In
their
own qualities and Fix the agreement mistake
its
Correct article usage
a good
good
healthy Punctuation problem
good,
lifestyle
. Use synonyms
in
urban Fix capitalization
In
Use synonyms
areas
has fresh air and no sedentary Punctuation problem
areas,
lifestyle
Use synonyms
but
Punctuation problem
, but
cities
Use synonyms
has
more polluted air.Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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task
Your task response shows you understand the topic, but the main point is not clearly stated in the opening and you do not fully expand it with strong, specific ideas.
coherence
Organize the essay into clear blocks: introduction, view of country life, view of city life, your view, and a conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with small connecting words (also, but, however, in addition) to guide the reader.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; common errors like healty, vilages, opoin are frequent and make meaning unclear.
content
There is an attempt to discuss both sides and to give a personal view.
content
You mention health care, air, and diet as parts of the health topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite