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The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportions of adult male
smokers
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 in seven
countries
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 and the global average in 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, most
countries
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 experienced a decline in the percentage of male
smokers
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 over the 15-year period, and
this
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 pattern is reflected in the world average as well.
However
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,
Egypt
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 and
Lebanon
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 were the exceptions, showing increases in smoking rates. Armenia consistently recorded the highest figures,
although
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 by 2015 it shared
this
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 position with Cuba. In 2000, Armenia had the largest proportion of male
smokers
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, at nearly 70%. Bangladesh followed with just over 60%,
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 Cuba recorded slightly above 50%. All three figures were noticeably higher than the global average, which stood at just above 40%.
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,
Egypt
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,
Lebanon
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, Mexico, and Australia reported lower-than-average levels, all below 40%, with Australia having the lowest rate at under 30%. By 2015, smoking prevalence had fallen in all
countries
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 except
Egypt
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 and
Lebanon
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.
Egypt
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 saw a sharp rise from around 35% to nearly 50%, and
Lebanon
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 increased from about 35% to just over 40%. Among the
countries
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 that declined, Bangladesh showed the most dramatic drop, falling from above 60% to below 40%. Australia remained the country with the lowest proportion of male
smokers
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 throughout the period, decreasing
further
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 to under 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words smokers, countries, egypt, lebanon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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