In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss and give your own opinion.

Healthcare and education are basic necessities for every human being to live better in society, and education is more important for children to grow in life. But nowadays these schools and medical
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are available only in cities when compared to villages. To discuss
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, in a plethora of states best institutions and hospitals are ready in towns. Some people discern that recently graduated doctors and teachers should work in remote
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at the beginning of their careers.
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, others believe that they should have their own free will to decide where they want to start their lives. First and foremost, faculty and health care centres are imperative to everyone.
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academies are available in most of the communities
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towns but medical apparatus is not feasible in rural
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.
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, people in these
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are not getting proper evaluation of their health, especially in need of an
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they are prone to suffer severe consequences.
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a survey, in times of India, more emergency cases are reported in rural
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, but they are unable to obtain medical material.
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lack
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a lack
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of
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poor people are not going to
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privately
owned and operated hospitals and institutions. To overcome
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disparity government has to provide these furnishings free of cost.
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, in most
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children are getting free education
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health
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care system. Not only developed regions but
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developing countries are planning to provide these services free of cost.
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, in my opinion, I strongly believe that teachers and doctors should provide
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few years of their services in the rural
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to develop their
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skills and communication.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states your view, then one or two body paragraphs, then a short conclusion.
grammar
Use simple words. Check grammar and spelling. Some sentences are long and wrong words were used. Rephrase to be clear.
content
Give real examples. Instead of general talk, name a thing like 'rural clinics lack staff' and show how it helps people.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas, like 'also, however, because, for example'.
content
There is a clear view in the end with your stance.
structure
You group ideas in paragraphs and use some linking phrases.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • disparity
  • access
  • quality education
  • healthcare
  • mandatory service
  • community development
  • shortages
  • job satisfaction
  • personal freedom
  • retention
  • incentives
  • financial bonuses
  • rural areas
  • urban areas
  • professionals
  • essential services
  • career choice
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