you are planning a vacation and want your friend to go with you Why do you want to take a vacation Describe your plan Invite him/her to go with you.

Dear Tom, I hope
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finds
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good health and spirit. I'm writing
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letter to invite you for a
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trip to Bali. As you know, we'd recently completed our second semester, and there is
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month
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vacation
to begin
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our next academic program.
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a holiday during that period is
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best way to de-stress from the study, and feel relaxed by connecting with nature, like
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to Bali. During our stay, we will try to cover famous historical places and
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I have booked two tickets for the concert for traditional folk music, which is played by
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indigenous
people who represent their culture through art.
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, you will be glad to explore the
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culinary
that has a fusion of Indo-Arab style. I'd booked two
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for you and me. I know
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how much you
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fascinated
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the
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Bali. Alas,
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in mind, I've chosen that place so that we can have great fun and time together. I hope you will consider my request and
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get back to me whenever you're free. Talk to you soon! Best regards, Yes Daddy

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grammar
Fix grammar and spell mistakes so sentences read cleanly.
coherence
Make a clear order: say why you want a holiday, what you will do, and how you invite your friend.
vocabulary
Use simple, common words. Check spell for key words and stick to ones you know well.
format
Use the correct letter form: start with Dear name and end with a friendly closing like Best regards.
content
Add more exact plans or places you want to see, foods to try, to show detail.
tone
Keep a warm and casual tone, as a friend letter, not too stiff.
content
The letter asks a friend to join and has a clear goal.
content
You give a plan with Bali and a concert.
tone
The closing is polite and friendly.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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