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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or dis agree with this statement?

Everything,
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coming
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the coming
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 times, will become available on
internet
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the internet
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, and
accessable
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accessible
 to everybody with no extra charges.
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 will eliminate the need
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to read
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 printed material. I do not support the aforementioned statement, as reading from
books
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 has its own advantages.
This
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 essay will delineate both aspects. On the one hand,
availability
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the availability
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 of information online gives
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to choose the most
relavent
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relevant
 and
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trusted
 source. Because of it, nobody needs to rely on
third
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 party for
latest
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the latest
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 news. During the time of COVID-19,
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,
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the majority
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 of people were seeking information on
official
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 website of
World
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 Health Organisation, rather than on different opinions by many newspapers.
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, it provides the pleasure of convenient reading anywhere you want to,
noone
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no one
 needs to rush to stores to purchase
latest
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 magazines or newsletters.
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, many people like to learn offline as it leads to less strain on
eyes
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the eyes
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. Those
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 who like to find data online
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face
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 many
eye related
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 issues, which is not a problem in
case
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the case
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 of printed stuff.
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, a lot of individuals like to read novels and
books
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 in physical forms by
choise
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choice
. An article,
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, was published in The Times,
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 that students like to read from
books
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 more than on computers, because it gives them freedom to use their imagination. I believe, reading from a
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books
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book
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 is more personal compared to learning online. Many folks
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including
 myself, prefer to read good
books
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, novels, and healing journals,
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 keeping a collection of those. It gives a feeling of satisfaction, as
this
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help
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helps
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 to relax one's mind. Selena
Gomeze
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Gomez
,
for instance
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,
reveled
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 in
her
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apply
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one of her interviews that she has a big collection of
books
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 at home, and she used to read those when she was dealing with
enxiety
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anxiety
. To recapitulate,
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although
 in today's epoch, everyone
prefer
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prefers
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 to get knowledge online
due to
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 convenience and
accessability
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accessibility
,
however
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, it can never replace the importance of reading actual printed material as it gives you a personal experience, and helps to relax your mind.

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Make the task answer clear in the first part. State your view directly and say what you will discuss.
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Keep each paragraph on one main idea. Use clear link words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
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Give more real, exact examples that fit the point.
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Check spelling and keep to simple words. Fix common mistakes like 'noone','relavent','trused','enxiety'.
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Use shorter, simple sentences. This helps show your idea clearly and avoids grammar errors.
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Finish with a short, clear ending that restates your view.
strength
The piece shows a clear view and seems to plan (intro, body, and conclusion).
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Examples such as WHO and a Times article show use of real ideas.
strength
There is effort to compare ideas and to give a personal touch.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital platforms
  • Global audience
  • Cost benefits
  • Environmental benefits
  • Carbon footprint
  • Tactile experience
  • Screen-free reading
  • Credibility
  • Misinformation
  • Digital divide
  • Access to digital resources
  • Lack of reliable internet
  • Enduring appeal
  • Collectability
  • Physical copies
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