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The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map describes the development of a college campus in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps give information about how a college
campus
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 has developed between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, the maps show that between 2005 and 2015, the sizes of
sevaral
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several
buildings
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in
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on
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 the
campus
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 had changed
and
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, and
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 some facilities
have
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were
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 constructed. Let's begin by looking at the
campus
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 map in 2005. A
play ground
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playground
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 was in the north east of the
campus
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and
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, and
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 a parking lot was to the south of the playground. In the north west of the
camus
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campus
, there were three
school
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buildings
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 and
,
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apply
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 there was a stadium
beteween
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between
 the
school
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buildings
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 and the
play ground
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playground
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. An office building and dining
hall
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 were in the
south west
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southwest
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 of the
campus
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. There had been several changes the the college
campus
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 in 2005 and 2015. In the north east of the
campus
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, the playground still
remaind
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remained
,
while
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 the parking lot had been moved
in
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to
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 the north west of the
campus
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and
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, and
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 a library and the dining
hall
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 occupied the space where the former parking lot
.
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had been.
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Meanehile
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Meanwhile
, the building where it was used as a dining
hall
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was coverted
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coverted
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converted
by
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into
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 a student centre. The
nuber
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number
 of
school
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buildings
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 had been reduced from three to two
and
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, and
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the
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apply
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one of the
school
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buildings
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 had been replaced by a clinic. The size of
stadium
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the stadium
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 had been
little
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a little
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 smaller than
2005
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in 2005
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,
while
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 the office building and the student centre where former dining
hall
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 had
been
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were
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 longer.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus, buildings, school, hall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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