Nowadays people get married and have kids in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

In recent years, many
people
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think that living your
life
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before getting married and having children in their thirties is worse than when they are younger. Does
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trend benefit the community? In
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essay, I'
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elaborate and explain whether I disagree or agree, and give my opinion
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with, there are some advantages to getting married and having kids when you are younger.
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,
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is good for the long term because you can enjoy
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before reaching the fifties.
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, your kids will finish college , and they'
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start sending you money, which you can spend and live the
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you wished for.
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, a survey from the UCSI university concluded that
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who get married at a young age have a better relationship than older couples. That's why most breakups ups from old
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.
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, living your
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throughout your twenties is better than living it in your fifties. Because you'
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be more energised and healthy.
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, you'
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want to do things older
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can'
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do, which ruins the experience.
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, one wants to rock climb and do risky actions, which hold the best memories.
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the other can'
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seem to do that.
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,
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who decide to live their lives before getting married will hold many good memories.
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the younger will start to live their
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between the ages of 45 and 55.
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, he'
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be weak and won'
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hold any good memories. And it won'
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really benefit society. That's why I strongly agree.

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State your view clearly at the start and keep it to the end. Do not flip flop.
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Answer the exact question. Say if the trend helps society, and give clear reasons.
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Keep to 2-3 main ideas. Add simple reasons and a short example for each.
coherence cohesion
Use simple links to connect ideas. Words like first, also, but, so, for example help a lot.
coherence cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one idea. Start with idea, then give reason and example, then finish.
coherence cohesion
Check grammar and punctuation. Short, clear sentences help readers.
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The topic is clear and you show your view.
task achievement
There are some facts or ideas that back up your view.
coherence cohesion
You try to plan with more than one idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • emotional maturity
  • secure upbringing
  • career prospects
  • education and career development
  • lifetime earnings
  • job satisfaction
  • health outcomes
  • demographic shift
  • population growth
  • ageing population
  • parental preparedness
  • responsibilities of parenting
  • modern healthcare
  • capable of having healthy pregnancies
  • balancing population growth
  • establish careers
  • save money
  • healthier relationships
  • better parenting
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