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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
The diagram illustrates the statistics about the top five countries for international tourism, which are France, the USA, Spain, China, and Italy , between 2012 and 2013.
Overall
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, all countries tend to have a distinct trend in 2012 and 2013. France held the 1st
tourists
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 visits in both years, with 83
million
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 in 2012, and 84.7
million
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 in 2013.
whereas
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 the USA held the most
tourist
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 spending in both years, with 126.2
billion
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 in 2012, and 139.6
billion
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 in 2013.
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 France held the third place for
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 spending with 53.6
billion
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 in 2012, and 56.1
billion
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 in 2013. And the USA held the second place for
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 visits with 66.7
million
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 in 2012, and 69.8
million
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 in 2013. On the one hand, Spain held the 3rd place for the number of
tourists
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 with 57.5
million
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 in 2012 and 60.7
million
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 in 2013.
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, its
tourist
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 spending was the second highest among other countries , with 56.3
billion
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 in 2012, and 43.9
billion
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 in 2013.
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, China held the 4th for the number of
tourists
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 with 57.7
million
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 in 2012, and 55.7
million
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 in 2013. And it held the 4th spot in
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 spending with 50
billion
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 in 2012, and 51.7
billion
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 in 2013.
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, Italy held the
last
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 spot in both the number of
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 , with 46.4
million
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 in 2012 and 47.7
million
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 in 2013. And its
tourist
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 spending with 41.2
billion
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 in 2012, and 43.9
billion
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 in 2013.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, million, tourist, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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