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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
The bar charts provide key information about the number of
marriages
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 and divorces in America from 1970 to 2000 and the marital
status
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 of the American people between the years 1970 and 2000. The units are measured in millions and percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the rate of
marriages
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 during the entire time period is significantly higher in
marriages
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 than in divorces.
In addition
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, the married account for over two-thirds of adult
status
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,
whereas
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 other categories like divorced, widowed, and never married represent the smallest proportion.
According to
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 what is shown, married individuals in two of the years form a substantial 70% in 1970 and 60% in 2000 of the marital
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. People who have never married represent nearly a fifth, and widowed individuals just below a tenth. People who were divorced had the smallest proportion. In terms of divorce rates in
status
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 USA, divorces remain considerably lower and constant, with around 1million.
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,
marriages
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 increase significantly in the two decades , nearly 2.5 million, before starting to decrease.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words marriages, status with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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